Please critique - Artists2artists Social Network2024-03-28T20:11:12Zhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/forum/topics/please-critique?groupUrl=critique&commentId=3077055%3AComment%3A116902&groupId=3077055%3AGroup%3A96152&feed=yes&xn_auth=nothankstag:artdeadline.ning.com,2012-03-15:3077055:Comment:1279192012-03-15T23:46:31.189ZRay DeBaunhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/RayDeBaun
<p>thanks</p>
<p>thanks</p> I'm not all that familiar wit…tag:artdeadline.ning.com,2012-03-14:3077055:Comment:1278222012-03-14T14:33:57.375ZMark Princehttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/MarkPrince
<p>I'm not all that familiar with this type of work so if i'm completely off the point then forgive me. However, as a visual response - I think the shape is nice, a good contrast between smooth and angular shapes and the longer i look, the more i seem to be dragged into it, though something is stopping me from dropping right in... the blue criss-crossed section for example; there are nice slightly angled lines that make me feel drawn into that section but for me i would like to see much more…</p>
<p>I'm not all that familiar with this type of work so if i'm completely off the point then forgive me. However, as a visual response - I think the shape is nice, a good contrast between smooth and angular shapes and the longer i look, the more i seem to be dragged into it, though something is stopping me from dropping right in... the blue criss-crossed section for example; there are nice slightly angled lines that make me feel drawn into that section but for me i would like to see much more angled lines that give more depth and almost give a sense of vertigo (if that makes sense!) and draw my eyes down into the sections below... Hope this helps and makes sense and is somewhere near the mark :)</p> I think it would make a great…tag:artdeadline.ning.com,2012-01-13:3077055:Comment:1195282012-01-13T09:37:35.897ZGavin Mayhewhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/GavinMayhew
<p>I think it would make a great sculpture. Gavin</p>
<p>I think it would make a great sculpture. Gavin</p> i like the balancetag:artdeadline.ning.com,2012-01-11:3077055:Comment:1190622012-01-11T04:31:59.405ZSkip Mckeehttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/SkipMckee
<p>i like the balance</p>
<p>i like the balance</p> Thanks Laurel, not to often d…tag:artdeadline.ning.com,2011-12-22:3077055:Comment:1172142011-12-22T18:18:01.669ZRay DeBaunhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/RayDeBaun
<p>Thanks Laurel, not to often do I get positive feedback on one of these pieces, too clean, not emotional enough, too many lines, too busy. </p>
<p>Thanks Laurel, not to often do I get positive feedback on one of these pieces, too clean, not emotional enough, too many lines, too busy. </p> Hi Ray, As soon as I opened i…tag:artdeadline.ning.com,2011-12-22:3077055:Comment:1169022011-12-22T07:39:20.773ZLaurel Sternberghttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/LaurelSternberg
<p>Hi Ray, As soon as I opened it, I liked it. I like the bold colors, the contrast, the variety of shapes which are harmonious and which construct a solid composition. It gives plenty for my eyes to play with, and keeps them circulating and exploring. Also it's happy. I get tired of sick or depressing art. I'll disagree with James on this one. Work doesn't have to be messy; it depends on what you're saying. I like that it's beautifully crafted.</p>
<p>Hi Ray, As soon as I opened it, I liked it. I like the bold colors, the contrast, the variety of shapes which are harmonious and which construct a solid composition. It gives plenty for my eyes to play with, and keeps them circulating and exploring. Also it's happy. I get tired of sick or depressing art. I'll disagree with James on this one. Work doesn't have to be messy; it depends on what you're saying. I like that it's beautifully crafted.</p> For me the work is too clean.…tag:artdeadline.ning.com,2011-12-21:3077055:Comment:1170352011-12-21T05:29:16.035ZJames MacMahonhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/JamesMacMahon
<p>For me the work is too clean. I would like to see the original doodle. Why a shaped panel?</p>
<p>For me the work is too clean. I would like to see the original doodle. Why a shaped panel?</p> Thanks Bentag:artdeadline.ning.com,2011-12-20:3077055:Comment:1167482011-12-20T17:50:01.076ZRay DeBaunhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/RayDeBaun
<p>Thanks Ben</p>
<p>Thanks Ben</p> Hi Ray,
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<p>Hi Ray,</p>
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<p>Hi Ray,</p>
<p>We edited your post so that your image shows. To post images you click on the "Media" button along the above navigation to upload or link your image for viewing. Thanks, Editor</p> It is a nice piece, perhaps r…tag:artdeadline.ning.com,2011-12-20:3077055:Comment:1169462011-12-20T16:25:25.435ZBen Mickelsonhttps://artdeadline.ning.com/profile/BenMickelson
<p>It is a nice piece, perhaps reminiscent of early Frank Stella. Once you break with the <strong>rect·an·gu·lar·i·ty</strong> of a traditional painting, a whole world of possibilities opens. I might consider constructing the various elements separately and then assembling them into a whole in future works.</p>
<p>It is a nice piece, perhaps reminiscent of early Frank Stella. Once you break with the <strong>rect·an·gu·lar·i·ty</strong> of a traditional painting, a whole world of possibilities opens. I might consider constructing the various elements separately and then assembling them into a whole in future works.</p>